violet Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 so does it finish with her seeing karls car???isn't there more? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trilliam Posted March 10, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 so does it finish with her seeing karls car???isn't there more?No-one knows where to cop Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
violet Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 pissed.if i knew that there was no ending...then i wouldn't of even started reading.i proper took the time out to read the whole thing...and now i don't even know how it finishes.warnings next time please. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soca Junkie Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 pissed.if i knew that there was no ending...then i wouldn't of even started reading.i proper took the time out to read the whole thing...and now i don't even know how it finishes.warnings next time please.LOL... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SWTEK9 Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 tbh more ppl givin replies like say its a good read..tht tru? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
violet Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 the way its written makes it long to read...and i don't believe that this is a true story....if it is then that girls life is f*ckeries...and she is some wastechick!but on the realz....after a while of reading all the drama and that....i got kind of interested in the story...like i actually wanted to know what happened next...it ain't that good that if it was a book i would buy it or anything...but if you're bored then its an alright read. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soca Junkie Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 If your're bored... sh*t keeps happening to her... so you just wanna keep reading to see if she gets f*cked over again LOL (well in my case) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trilliam Posted March 10, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 tbh more ppl givin replies like say its a good read..tht tru?just read it dude, she gets pissed on and spat on like it's Killa Season 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SWTEK9 Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 ima write one.brb at 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dipset Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 read a few sentenceslongessso the whole ting and topic is about some yout writing a narsty story in txt slang yeh? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest mattthernbsinger Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 read a few sentenceslongessso the whole ting and topic is about some yout writing a narsty story in txt slang yeh?yep and keshia from sugar babes somehow got mixed into it.15 pages of pure fraff.i said it should of got locked 10 pages ago.meh. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Young £ Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 i read 2 chapters after she sees ricardos whip..karl lengs down someonemalachi rapes her with a gunkarl lengs someone else downkeshia gets shot by accidentwhos got the next ones Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Young £ Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 found it Chapter 17....................................i sat there with the tinyest hope.. but i was scared if it was ricardo and karl i didnt want anyting to happen to dem. malachi is a wild nutcase.. i sat there weeping."why you still cryin baby,dnt worry i will give you a nyc bath in our house" he sed wid da most biggest n happiess smile on his face.this guy had seriously lost the plot. "shut-up" i whispered. malachi turned his hed in confusion, he lukt at me 4 a few seconds. i found it hard 2 lose eye contact, i was scared. REALII SCARED.the car parked up in the centre of sum estate at least 45minutes away from my original house..malachi smiled at me then a vibrate began to develope on da car seat. malachi answered the fone..'wag1 you got her stuff' malachi sed'na her man slammed the door on me'i did not have a clue hu was on the ova side of the fone, all i cud here was a deep toned voice muttering quite slowly.'you aint getting your money, you didnt do the job.i felt a cold hand touch my face, i moved in panic. it was malachi.'i will call you back' i sed in a gentle bt ergent voicehe smiled at me and sed dat i was all he wanted. i sat there hoping and praying that ricardo and karl wud help bt there was still no sign ov them.'luk at me' malachi sed as his deep voice began 2 raise ova the radio music. i turned my hed wid da least pace. i faced him luk i did not make any sign of eye contact.'do you love me baby?'i jus sat there and didnt say anyting, this man had lost the plot.'juss pll-plzz bring me home'i sed stutturing and tryin 2 gasp 4 breath.meanwhile..ricardo sat in the car in rage'DATS IT'WAT ****** DOOR DUZ DIS PRICK LIVE AT' he screwed'*** MAN LETS GO' karl sed in a pissed voice'NAA HES HERE SUMWER I HAV A FEELIN N SHE IS WID HIM'karl sat there blank jus lukin round in the estate. he spotted a car jus sitting the with the lights on.'**** it'ricardo jumped out ov the car and heded straight 4 da estate.'*** HERE MAN'karl called.there was no sign ov responce or even a thought that went through ricardos mind. not 2 long afta karl followed.ricardo heded 4 da estate steps. wen he got there, a group of boiz bopped out ov a yard.'oi ***** hole, wat enz yu from cuz?'ricardo tuk no notice nothin was sinkin into his hed ova then knowin his onli love wnted to leave him. so he kws! ricardo panted through the crowd boiz. 1 ov them hu lukt lyk the leader of the pack stud in the way ov karl. karl was already not in the mood. this man stud the with half his clothes on. he was wearing jeanz n herarchis. he was a tall hench mixrace boi.karl stud in front ov him and screwed.'wat farrkin enz you frm blood?' the deep voice sed meanly'move' karl sed'cuz?' sed deep voice'MOVE MAN' he screamed'or wat g.. wat yu gonna do..'karl was mad at dis point. he kissed his teeth and 'BANG' the fat hand from the side of the convo connected karl in the temple. karl stud up immediately.he ulled sumting black out of his trousers and pushed it onto 'deep voices' hed.'which 1 ov yu big boiz dun dat!' karl shouted meanly.no1 in the crowd answered. karl had dun alot of crazy things in his life but nothin lyk this. almost but he never had 2 pull out a strap. karl was breathing way to fast. he was barely allowing oxygen 2 *** through to his lungs. at this point karl cud ov dun anyting.'NO1 NAA' karl continued'ite hu here kws wer malachi lives or jams n dnt tink man has 4gotten bout dat punch init. im tellin you manz dnt bludclart start wid me bredda.''h-he jams at da bottom ov da-da-da-da estate in a car park most ov da tym' deep voice stutturded in panic.'kll..'he replied.1 ov the boiz in front ov the hostage stud there smiling. karl caught him pullin sumting out frm the coner ov his eye. karl lukt up..'!!BANNNG BANNNG!!''wat was dat!!' malachi whisperedi sat there scared.'plz may karl n ricardo be safe plz..' i thought wid tears washin dwn my skinafta da two gun shots went of. everyting went silent. ricardo stopped in shock. he turned round and ran bck towards the crowd. he had totally 4got about karl being with him. his mind was onli on 1 thing. as he ran towards the group of manz. the crowd skattured but 2.'KARL KARL!!' ricardo screamed.he looked at the blood runnin dwn the nearest drain.'****** *****!!' karl shoutedthe vicim layed there on the floor almost ded.. it was deep voice'wa'wa'wa'whyy' as he coft up blud frm his throut.karl kissed his teeth and stepped ova him. karl n ricardo started 2 walk. kalr turn round and sed.'by the way, im from plaistow!'karl and ricardo then pikt bck up there pace n heded 4 the bottom of the estate..chapter 18'malachi'i sed'yh baby''why you doin this to me''wat am i doin baby, i love you man, or r you tlkin bout me makin you love me.' malachi sed as he stroked my 4hed.'i wnt ricardo'malachi gripsed my hed and tightened. the anger and rage that he showed through his eyes was enough he did even hav 2 speak, he pulled sumting out ov da bottom of his car and sed'no you dnt.. you miss me' then began 2 smile. i felt the force of his big palms squeeze on my temples. i didnt kw wat 2 do i was so scared.. i felt a liquid feelin run dwn da side of my leg and under my bum.'wats dat bby' malachi sed as he released my hed'aww poor baby peed herself...' i sat there in my pool of wee, i didnt even realize wat happen i was overly scared.'here bbe, let me help you' he sed smiling.'NO!'i answered bck as i tried 2 pull his ruff fingers away frm my body. he pushed sumting cold n tinck into my body. i remebered that tye ov feeling from the group ov estate guys that had raped me b4. i began 2 breath heavy, anxious for air, tears began 2 pour down my face, i cud taste the saltiness in my tears.'st-st-st-stop dis plz stop'i scaredly muttured.'do you kw wat i hate about yu, your so ignorent, i love you and yu cnt even show me any love bck... why bby why?. wat else do you wnt me 2 do?' he replied'just let me go home' i quietly replied'yu kw wat!'i cud see that tention was building up rapidly, my heart was beating out ov my chest i cud feel it..'your right.. but b4 i take you lets clean you up yh bby'he smiled at me and reached 4 my bottom half of my clothes. he had made me change into 1 ov his clothes on the way to his house. i was wearing a black nike zipped jumper wid a hoody and black wid white stripes nike tracksuit bottoms.i was cryin at dis point alot. i felt sumting push further into da side ov my body as his hands slipped dwn the trousers. he was feelin how wet my pum had got from da piss. he then tuk his hand out and lickt his fingers.this man was a nasty mother ****** hu realii needed help. i kept quite wid da feel ov tears drippin frm my chin. i lukt at da driver 4 sympathy but he jus turned bck around like nothin was even happenin. from dat point i kw wat was goin 2 happen. i tried 2 hold my legs in tight.'open your bludclart legs!' i released my gaurd. he pulled my trousers dwn and told me he wnts 2 try sumting new..i was seriously tinkin wat else cud he wnt wid me n wen will dis stop. he layed me dwn on da bck seat ov da car and told me he loves me. with my hed flat on da chair i prayed that nothin wud happen more will happen 2 me n may ricardo and karl plz stil b lukin. tears jus kept poring dwn my eyes it seems lyk i had no controlt over it,'shut up' as he kissed his teeth. he called the driver and told him 2 pull his fone from his pocket. the driver did as he was told. malachi seemed to own a lot repsect from the driver. almost seemed lyk the driver was scared himself.'put it on record' malachi insisted.the driver had da camera facing my pum. i jus layed there and cryed.i had the shivers i had a feelin dat sumting was goin 2 happen sumting crazy. then suddenly a thick hard n cold object was shoved into my vergina. it began 2 tear me. i screamed he kept pushing it in harder n harder hoping for a nyc reaction. this object felt nothin lyk fingers or even a dik. i slowly opened my eyes ergent 2 kw wat it was and wen i lukt up i was in even mor shock n fet 1000 tymz of fear run dwn my spine. i screamed with a wild pain forced into my body..it was a gun..chapter 19"How du u lyk this one, u fink ricardos got a fukin big ****, wait until see how diss ****** feels"....i'm screaming,tears r cummin down my eyezz like its nuffin. he's pushing it further. i can barely fuking breath with the amount of pain i'min. he's laughing and smiling with the driver... how can some1 be diss fukin evil!?! "Why da *** ent u wet... don't ufukin like the big tingsss. i fought dass wat u wnted??? I Cudnt even replyy d pain was too much, but weneva he spoke e jus pushedit in harder..."you kno i love you...and il do anything to make you happy. so if my dik ent enuff den try diss....now its jus unbearablehe's pushing it in 2muchhh. I've lost my voice screamingg. somebodyy help???ricardo and karl are hiding. ricardo can see evertings datss goin onn, tears pouring down hiss eyesss. he cnt move. if he duzmalachi mite shoot her in her ***** by accident. he's stuck. but he can't bare 2 see his future wife like diss. now he hears it"scream *****, SCREAM." he starts to let bogey drop out of his nose, his heart beating out of his chestt tears flowing down his eyes....then comes it.. ricardo smashesthe car window with his fistss and grabs malachi, d driver pulss out his gun and trys to shoot ricardo, but karls grabs his n bussestwo at him, leeving him deddd. then they both grab malachi hu pulls the gun out of keisha but then..... as ricardo hits him, he accidently squeezesthe trigger...hitting keisha directly in her thigh. blood is everywhere.chapter 20omdzzz i've beeen hitt... f*ckkingggggg hellllll its so painfulll, ryt next 2 ma *****, i can't even cry, i feel too weak. i can see them fitingaww my knight in shining armour, i knu he wud save me. karl comes to my aid. " o my fukin days keisha, are you ok" i can hear him but im two weak tospeak. so i smile instead "omdz i cnt leave youu. keep yur eyes open ok" i can see tears filling up in his face. he thinks i can't hear him. i cann.meanwhile ricardo n malachi r fytin. then ricardo swoops his legs n malachi falss to the ground, dropin his gun. ricardo jumps on top of him. hitting himtwice " u tink ur a badaman yeh cuzzz" ricardo punches him. blood drips down from malachis noes. i feel soz for him so much dat tears are cummin down myeyess. i dont wnt tu cry 4 him but hes so pityful."don't u kno how tu ****** treat a woman u ****" ricardo grabs his gun and points it at him.i wna shout stopp bt i cnt. "dont worri jus relax ricardos gna sho him wag1" den y d *** dont i feel ne betaa."she lykd it.if she didnt she wudn't have let me *** in 2nd period last tuesday..er pussys nuff bigg like reh u fukin pon er pom every dai or summin" i want to go fukin mad now,ricardo looks at me. tryna keep a cool face..but he cnt, his lips and his hands a shaking on malachis coat."is it tru yeh.""corse its tru. y u tink shes silent...she was screaming about ten minits ago" "keisha is it tru??" " yo rudeboi r u fukin deff...i pressed it nicely, she has somefat knockerz fam, and i mean fam" "KEISHA IS IT FUKIN TRU" i cudnt speak becoz of d pain,bt he knu it wus tru. u cud tell der wus no point in reasoning wid him."why.." he sed softly i didn't reply, karl looked down."u fukd up now boii" andf i did, i really did, he loved me and i flopped him, again. i don't even no y e cametu save me. "oi ricardo, il tell u why i did it. im tryna sho u shes a fukin slag. dump it, b4 u catch someting. im tryna help you....." ricardos eye begins 2 twich"why the **** wud u help me, du i fukin no u" im strtin 2 lose conshusness, karl is 2 bizzy wid dem 2 pay attention. " i swear down, i dont like her. shes a dead ting,but shes got someting, i kno it. aids, hiv polio wun of dem ting dem derrrr. lock it" my eyes r strtin 2 blur, i can feel the energy leaving me, ders nuffin i can do.Chapter 21"who are you, what the *** is goin on. why are you doing this" malachi laughed, an dark evil laugh " u dunt fukin undastand, i'm doing this for your own sake. im trynahelp" ricardo had enuff and cocked bak his gun "cuzz if u dunt strt tlkin imma strt sprayin. whts goin on" malachi lookd at him and sighed " look, i kno hu u r bt u dunt nohu i am. make sense, were linked" omdzz diss guy is wurst dan i thought. " wers ur mum" ricardo looked mre confused dan ever.at diss point i wus loosin ma hearing, bt ricardo didnt seem to notice, or care. "my mum yeh, i dunt no, she left when my dad died init, y d *** du u care"malachis smile widend. " hmm, and where d *** is ur dad ryt now" d confusion on ricardos face was at large. "in abney park cemetery, y??""ur dads is John "snowman" jefferson, am i ryt" ricardo at this point had hit him around his face wit the back of his gun, " stop ****** about, wts goin on.""oi calm down, hahaha, when did ur dad die" ricardo was gtin tears in his eyes again " about 6/7 years ago, yyy" malachis smiled grew even big, i started to lose breath"6/7 years ago...hmmm exactly the same time i moved in to these endzz. n u no wts funnier.mi dadss name wass john "snowman" jefferson. or thats what his frendds call him.ricardo instantly let go "oi u, wut u tryna say." " ent it obvious...dat day ur dad "died" he was helpin me n his wife, my mum, move into r new home" mylegs wer dying. my heartbeat was fading. ricardo was baffed " so ur tryna say..." "yesss..yesss du u gt it. OUR, and i say OUR dad faked his def so e cud spend time wid me n ma family. yo famhe ent ded, hes at home waitin 4 me so e can gimme a big hug n ask me about my day.. hahahaha" " but..he...i went to his funeral" malachi startedto crease more than ever," did u even look in the coffin,it was empty. papa always did have d muny tu play the funniest practical jokes. funni iniit." ricardo wiped his tears. karls was swelling upwith sympathy for him. " so..were..ii..""YESSS, wer half brudddas famm, im tryna warn uu dumpp err. b4 u catch sumting. i dont wna lose ma onli brudda u dig. diss gal is so slaggish ppl got storys about er on d internetn msn. so fam help me kill er. ricardo lookd at me and lookd at malachi, hu had a great big grin on his face. " look ricardo, after this get shanice and *** 2 my houseso he can xplain.ok?, bt first deal wid dat fukin slag" ricardo paused. and then nodded "ok" and nodded at karl. i cudnt take it.i passed out. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FACE OFF Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 i am not reading that anyone that is at work and reads all of that has to get their priorities straight. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Agent31 Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 them jada fire wannabes there Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Who Knows? Who Cares? Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 but on the realz....after a while of reading all the drama and that....i got kind of interested in the story...like i actually wanted to know what happened next...that is coz you're a sket Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axiom Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 LMAO this is jokes.the way it's typedthe way she's a boshlmfao*carries on reading**editwt da f*ck iz alla dis?' I asked hldin up 1 of da mny bagz full of crack cocaine'Iz crack' he sed.LMFAO Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest mattthernbsinger Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 but on the realz....after a while of reading all the drama and that....i got kind of interested in the story...like i actually wanted to know what happened next...that is coz you're a sketlol swear this topic needs to be locked now Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VonBoyage Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 Wait wait..Man got to chapter 6/7Its not as bad as i thought it would be Questions:1. How many parts of this are there in total2. Does anyone have part 1 - end, cause i weren't on browsing/scrolling thru bare pages, plus i actually wana read all of it.3. Are the audio clips worth the DL ? Zshare ain't ME, but I can imagin some of u lot crackin me up still.BASICALLY.. I NEED AN ARCHIVE.. TEXT OR AUDIO.In before the lock. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Francis Coquelin Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 but on the realz....after a while of reading all the drama and that....i got kind of interested in the story...like i actually wanted to know what happened next...that is coz you're a sketlol swear this topic needs to be locked nowjam you pussyoleGTFO my internets Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest mattthernbsinger Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 but on the realz....after a while of reading all the drama and that....i got kind of interested in the story...like i actually wanted to know what happened next...that is coz you're a sketlol swear this topic needs to be locked nowjam you pussyoleGTFO my internetsthis is why this topic should be locked.jam and pussyhole should not be used in the same sentance. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VonBoyage Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 Nah man this ting is good.I didnt kno about it, hol tite the entertainment for the yutes today.*carries on reading till the archive pops up* Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axiom Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 but on the realz....after a while of reading all the drama and that....i got kind of interested in the story...like i actually wanted to know what happened next...that is coz you're a sketlol swear this topic needs to be locked nowjam you pussyoleGTFO my internetsc/sno need 4 it tu b lockdstoppin hatnz on da fred Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VonBoyage Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 Who read all of it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest mattthernbsinger Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 but on the realz....after a while of reading all the drama and that....i got kind of interested in the story...like i actually wanted to know what happened next...that is coz you're a sketlol swear this topic needs to be locked nowjam you pussyoleGTFO my internetsc/sno need 4 it tu b lockdstoppin hatnz on da fredallow it u post in every topic hense ur post count is over 1000 allready. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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